The Wild Woods

Continuing with our work on Narrative here are two examples of suspense paragraphs by Joshua and Azizah.

The Wild wood

I was walking through the pitch-black wood. Trees looked as if they were approaching me. Creatures stood still and stared at me. I was feeling petrified. I slipped in puddles, tripped over rocks and the glowing eyes of creatures started to follow me. The tree's rotten arm fell right in front of me. I saw a face in the tree hole. I completely freaked out and started to run. I imagined there were things trying to get me so I sprinted faster. Then I heard a loud GRR! My heart jumped out of my mouth. I thought this was it so, rapidly, I leaped into the tree and hid. The animal gave up and went away. I was safe. For now.

By Joshua

The Wild Woods

As I slowly walked through the deep gloomy woods I could hear the sound of broken pieces of twigs as they cracked under my feet. The shining moon was coming up as it was beginning to get dark. The tree branches snapped and swayed as the cold air blew across my face and made scary shadows in front of me. Suddenly I felt something move on my shoulder. Something cold and slimy wet.

I opened my mouth; I was about to scream but nothing came out. Steadily, I turned around to see what was on my shoulder but there was nothing there behind me. I carried on walking, the leaves on the ground rustled and the wind blew. I felt as though something was following behind me but every time I turned around nothing was there. The hairs on the back of my neck were standing, my heart was pounding and my palms were sweating. I felt so frightened.

I turned around once more; I thought I saw something. I rubbed my eyes just to check. It was still there the thing was behind the trees. Its eyes were big and bright, the colour green. They stared at me hard then suddenly it pounced on me. I ran quickly, rapidly, fast. It was chasing me and it wouldn't stop. It looked tall and big and was hiding in under a black cloak. I was so scared. I slowed down for a bit and tried to catch my breath. But it was still after me.